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Author:  sabretoothpick [ Wed Feb 09, 2011 11:55 pm ]
Post subject:  Proofreading of an offer
I need someone to proofread the following offer please, so it makes sense and it doesn't look like an Austrian wrote it :). I would really appreciate it. Thank you.

Quote:
Offer of assignment

The company x (based in location a) in the capacity as owner of company y (based in location b) and company z (based in location c) offers an interest of 5 % at the price of EUR 2.000.000.

The exercise of this option is limited in time till 30 April 2011.

In order to accept this offer, please sign below.
Author:  Wozniak [ Thu Feb 10, 2011 3:21 pm ]
Post subject:  Re: Proofreading of an offer
so, Company X owns Y and Z and is offering 5% interest on Euro 2.000.000

my non-lawyer way of writing this would be pretty similar to yours.

the company x (based in location a), in the capacity as owner of company y (based in location b) and company z (based in location c), offers an interest of 5 % at the price of EUR 2.000.000.

Theexercising of this option is limited in time available till 30 April 2011.


thats my take on it.
Author:  Stuuuuuuu [ Thu Feb 10, 2011 3:24 pm ]
Post subject:  Re: Proofreading of an offer
I like "This offer will expire on April 30, 2011" for the last line.
Author:  CriminallyVu1gar [ Thu Feb 10, 2011 5:23 pm ]
Post subject:  Re: Proofreading of an offer
till is an abbreviation of until, and not the correct one (which would be 'til)
Author:  NYIntensity [ Thu Feb 10, 2011 6:47 pm ]
Post subject:  Re: Proofreading of an offer
Otherwise you would be referring to a till, which is not an abbreviation at all, or to the action one would take, to till, as in soil prior to farming.
Author:  sabretoothpick [ Thu Feb 10, 2011 6:48 pm ]
Post subject:  Re: Proofreading of an offer
Thanks guys
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